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lil  ·  3365 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: A Lily in bloom

I love the tag. There should be #ask tags for you and others as well.

    Please respond via poetry.

How about doggerel? (Doggerel? Wasn't she King Lear's ugliest daughter?)

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Please Respond Via Poetry

You ask me to play the poetry card?

That's how you make a grrl's life hard.

Rhyming couplets might just do --

I'll squeeze out a line or two.

But TNG, where do I start?

Do I have a broken heart?

Revellations have been made

He said sex workers have been paid.

TMI? TMI! you say

Sure, I'll save it for another day.

Emotions abound, my heart is swelling

It's all over, but the yelling.

The heart is cracked amid the din

But that is how the love gets in.

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Now tng, add to the poem as another voice. Advance the plot or develop character using only rhyming couplets.





thenewgreen  ·  3362 days ago  ·  link  ·  

So glad you replied

I'm sorry he lied

His loss, I must say

He'll regret this some day

To neglect a lily

Well, that's just silly

Who pays for a fake flower

Especially by the hour

When you have the real deal

I know your wounds will heal

:)

lil  ·  3362 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Tee hee, you mention a deal

Maybe one out there is real

I wrote some couplets about this guy

Don't read if you are shy:

Here's a little, just a tease

(it might horrify -- or please)

I have a slot I want to fill with someone nice and easy

Find me please a man who will as long as he's not sleazy

He must have a lot of class, money is a must

I prefer a nice tight ass, and a good hard thrust

He must be very funny and charm me with his talk

He can lick my cunny and I will like his cock

There's more:

It's x-rated, but kind of a hoot

Wait my computer wants to reboot.

(I can't believe I wrote this - long long ago, in a province far away)

thenewgreen  ·  3362 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Your latest rhyme

It blew my mind

It's kind of flirty

Super dirty

A little quirky

Not safe for worky

Rhyming cock with talk

Purists will balk

X-rated lil

is quite a thrill

hope she finds mr. Money

To satisfy her cunning

lil  ·  3362 days ago  ·  link  ·  

The whole poem is called "Scheduling" and was published in Bite Me, a book of poems about love and lust, published in Spring 1997. I guess I haven't submitted it to Hubski ever. I wonder why. (Honestly, I should be pming this to you. Here's the entirety: (By the way, the system is removing my stanza separations. BUGSKI, but including separations when I go into the alternate formatting.)

  I have a slot I want to fill

With someone nice and easy.

Send me please a man who will

(So long as he's not sleazy).

  He must have a lot of class.

Money is a must.

I'd prefer a small tight ass

And a good hard thrust.

  It's best if he's reliable

And hardly ever late.

His body should be pliable

And not too out of date.

  I'd like him to be funny

To charm me with his talk.

He can like my cunny

And I will lick his cock.

  Make him not too famous

or married to a shrew.

I don't want to be discreet

The way I was with you.

  It's true I've many lovers.

I juggle them like balls.

Some slip under covers,

And sometimes one just falls.

  You wanted to be famous,

To win that upward climb.

You told me when you dropped me

I took up too much time.

  But I'll find that replacement -

Though you may laugh and taunt

And I'll be rich and famous

And still get all I want.

dublinben  ·  3362 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Get a room already! :-)

b_b  ·  3362 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Wow, the full version kind of exudes some anger in the way the excerpt didn't. Changes it a lot.

lil  ·  3362 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Yeah, published in 1997, written around 1977 about one of my university profs. Things were different then.

Kind of dates me, eh? Who on hubski was even born in 1977?

thenewgreen  ·  3362 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I was born in 1977

lil  ·  3359 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Same year as Elvis Costello, "My Aim is True" -

thenewgreen  ·  3359 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I'm not going to get too sentimental like those other sticker valentines...

Yeah, it's a great song that is perhaps hitting a little too close to home for you right now. Am I right? Hope you are well pal.

lil  ·  3359 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I was referring to the whole album, but dude - I'm fine. Details soon.

Meanwhile, it's getting better all the time!