I read this on reddit too. I have to say, I'm really anal about line breaks and I agree with the redditor that made a quip about these particular line breaks being arbitrary. I think in many instances the current breaks weaken the lines. I do find it interesting and it takes me into a strange place, but I wonder what Woodrow Wilson and the thread of homosexuality throughout the poem have to do with anything.
I am not totally sure how I feel about this poem, but for a poem I found on Reddit, not knowing how I feel about it actually means it's doing better than the average. The poem made me think, and I was interested to see how others would take it. I'm glad you commented too. I noticed on Reddit the submitter said they spent a whole lot of time arranging the space/placement of the words on the paper and I agree that as a reader/writer, frankly, I find them distracting. As a visual arts project I find it more successful. I'm really not sure how successful the poem is, just as a poem. I was not really impressed by the text when I read it by itself.