Interesting write up. I'm glad to finally see some short story writing on Hubski. Look forward to seeing more content from you! Edit: I see that you welcome discussion. What were you going for with the narrator? I feel like the suicide was rushed and perhaps not explained, or was that what you were going for? His only thoughts pertaining to suicide were that no one had the right to judge him. He didn't really ever think about WHY he wanted to die, which I feel someone who is suicidal would lay out methodically.
I appreciate it! It might be awhile until I post another short story, but in the meantime I will be doing my best to post poems every once a week or so. Discussion: The lack of information pertaining to why my character truly wanted to commit suicide was intentional. This was my attempt to show how there can be people, whether they are family, friends, or strangers, around us and not provide the information about wanting to end their lives and suddenly do, leaving us in shock. This is usually the situation in a lot of suicide cases, sadly. The second thing is that I wanted to give plenty of space for the reader to dwell on and attempt to understand where the narrator is coming from based on the events before finding out the narrator will commit suicide. Granted it was a bit of a stretch because only a couple of days worth of the narrator's life is shown with the addition of some brief recollections. Nevertheless, the information I chose to embed all have some deeper meaning behind it--at least most of the information. I hope that answers your question! Cheers.