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This could be much stronger if you wrote it more like a philosophy thesis, where it is common to explain the previous ideas on the subject, then to refute them based on observations, logic, and thought experiments, among other methods. Finally, and generally only at the very end, would you provide an alternative, and then explain how it follows logically from the problems with the other systems of thought.