Ok so, it didn't end up 100% postal servicey. I went a little weird with it and I don't know if everything 100% works but I think I'm mostly done :). Changed up the arrangement a bit and the tempo. I keep listening to it and I think my ears are tired so if the mixed is unbalanced I apologize. https://www.dropbox.com/s/6zbck1jw180lnpz/OOTPHubski.wav?dl=0 It's also very different....
It's fantastic. My wife listened and said, "it's beautiful." and then followed with "it could be a hit." The "beautiful" thing she has said about maybe..... 3-4 of the hundreds of songs I have written. The "hit" thing, zero till now. I really like the interpretation. You took what was a bridge/interlude and made it the verse. It works. I love the build of it, the dynamics etc. I love the instrumentation you added and the melodies. You are a talented guy randomuser and I'm glad you are participating in these. I'm officially a fan of your work. My only criticism would be the ending. It needs a more abrupt ending and not the introduction of the guitar etc. Your version is such a nice composition and it's pretty tight and then goes all loose at the end. I think it should end at "bruises that I leave." As sung sans music but with the lyric "behind" echoing after. -just my two cents. Dude, you should link to some of your music, I'd like to hear what you do. Again, great work! I loved it.
I'm glad you and your wife liked it. The ending is just something I kind of do a lot of the time with tracks I'm working on and have really wonky intros and outros lol. Sort of a Trent Reznoresque trait of my composition. I haven't really posted any personal stuff like my soundcloud because I've been trying to keep low key/not make a fool out of myself over here as it's insoms place to hang out so just trying to be respectful of the girlfriend and her space haha. But here's my www.soundcloud.com/lovelovemusic
Dude, I really want to hear this right now. Any chance you can just email me the MP3. I'm driving and will be for the next few hours and can't get it to stream via dropbox. Soundcloud would work too. TIA.