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TheGreatAbider16 · 4054 days ago · link · · parent · post: Today's Writing Prompt: I'd Like to Be Whoever I Damn Well Please

   I'd like to be whoever I damn well please.
   The world around me does not prevent this, but the demons dwelling inside.

   I want to feel compassion. I want to feel kind.
   I want the courage to leave jealousy and hatred behind.

   When I think of the people who have changed my life,
   I wonder why I'm not more like them.

   Sincerity, support, and genuine, smiling eyes.
   What makes me lesser in character?
   Why do I lack that love toward mankind?

   A mindfulness of this, I hope, will change me in time.
   I'll mold my character and be the light we all hope to find.

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humanodon · 4054 days ago · link ·

   |What makes me lesser in character?
   Why do I lack that love toward mankind?|

These are good questions that I think you should explore in the poem.

+discuss+discuss

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TheGreatAbider16 · 4053 days ago · link ·

Thanks for the feedback!

+discuss+discuss

lil · 4054 days ago · link ·

Hi Great Abider

Thanks for responding to the prompt. You've shown us that being whoever you damn well please is not as easy as it might seem. As you say, demons of jealousy and hatred (and others) keep the better person from emerging. so true.

+discuss+discuss

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TheGreatAbider16 · 4053 days ago · link ·

I'm glad you liked it!