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Kaius · 4062 days ago · link · · parent · post: Writers of Hubski: Write a captivating first line...
meh, not great. He could still hear those words, 'Try to be happy'.
It had been 6 years but his young sons final words had haunted Martin every day since he had heard them.
thenewgreen · 4062 days ago · link ·
This may work even better without the first line. Later in the story you could reveal what it was the son said, or better yet never reveal it. Sometimes letting the reader postulate is more powerful.
I'm cheating with the 'single line' here. 'There is an art to it' the man said, 'really' Martin replied his voice distant as if he was far away, 'oh yes, not just any rope will do, and the knot has to be just right' said the man, 'get on with it' Martin replied.