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IntimidatingScones  ·  4323 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: There is Nothing to Writing

I understand that today most writers like words, words, words, punch. But if you notice the writers I listed as admiring, they all use the technique of weaving words so that each idea connects not with the next but with the one after. This is why you're getting such a smooth feeling and missing the punch. The point is the weave of it.

    I fear that when I write, I uselessly speak to mute ashes.

was woven with

    And so I may uselessly speak to mute ashes....

above it, which was woven with

    I arrive here, brother, at this miserable funeral,

Above that, which weaves into

    It matters none that I bleed, and read the blood profussed so wondrously by these writers long dead.

If read in the order of the original post, the interweavings gives not a punch but a dawning realization.

You've actually reiterated my frustration that people prefer to be punched than to sit and contemplate the dawn.